I had to write a sonnet for Literature, and I am dreadful at writing poetry when I don't want to and am not inspired... so can you guys give me any tips or pointers and honestly tell me if it's any good, please? The rhyme scheme is a b b a c d d c e f f e g g. The beat per line is supposedly 5, although I found three beats for a few of them, they can all match a clapped five beat pace. D:
Also, can you tell me what you think it means? I'm really interested to know what people think of it.
Mismatched Key
I looked at the world today to see
A place in which I knew was dead and gone
It really looked like what you did, was done
Thinking of a place that has no key.
So when I looked behind you'd become lost
These wings, my heart, you took them all away
I gave them all to you because that day
I knew I'd have to act at such a cost.
Your freedom from the world, a tiny cage
It's something I'm afraid you cannot keep
Go back into your never-ending sleep
And dream the world that is your final stage,
The lock that you had broken, now replaced
Sits linking chains around our last embrace.
The meaning: A human who used to be an angel but gave it up to help the world who is stuck in an endless redundant life, y'know, like the circle of life. So basically earth is resembled as a being, and the angel and the earth are in love. So the angel will always be trapped in the tiny cage that is earth, but they love each other so it's okay?
Also, can you tell me what you think it means? I'm really interested to know what people think of it.
Mismatched Key
I looked at the world today to see
A place in which I knew was dead and gone
It really looked like what you did, was done
Thinking of a place that has no key.
So when I looked behind you'd become lost
These wings, my heart, you took them all away
I gave them all to you because that day
I knew I'd have to act at such a cost.
Your freedom from the world, a tiny cage
It's something I'm afraid you cannot keep
Go back into your never-ending sleep
And dream the world that is your final stage,
The lock that you had broken, now replaced
Sits linking chains around our last embrace.
The meaning: A human who used to be an angel but gave it up to help the world who is stuck in an endless redundant life, y'know, like the circle of life. So basically earth is resembled as a being, and the angel and the earth are in love. So the angel will always be trapped in the tiny cage that is earth, but they love each other so it's okay?
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